which sentence sounds better?
The mountains and valleys I have faced throughout my high school experience have pushed me nearly to my breaking point, but I have overcome them.
or
Throughout the ups and downs of my high school experience I have been pushed nearly to my breaking point, but I have overcome them.
or
The ups and downs I have faced throughout my high school experience have pushed me nearly to my breaking point, but I have overcome them.
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I like the first one best, but I would change the phrasing to: "have nearly pushed me to my breaking point..."
None of them sound very good; they are convoluted, run-on sentences. They are also very predictable.
How about something like this:
My high school experience has been fraught with many challenges, some of which I thought would surely send me to my breaking point. But in the end I overcame those challenges, and in doing so I learned many important lessons... (and so on and so forth)
I'd say the first phrase because it contains more imagery, which makes it more interesting and creative.
The third one. It sounds more put together.