This is a poem for a school project. I was supposed to be a son or daughter who's dad drinks and that I am having a hard time with it. Is my poem good enough for my teacher? Can you understand every part of it?
Your end nears
As you drink beer.
It’s like you crave
For your grave.
Your act is bad
As the role of our dad.
Apart, our family you tear.
Which for us is unfair.
With us you verbally fight
To get your way right.
We’ve supported you
The hard times through.
When you tried to quit,
You made excuses like ‘With only beer I can live, I admit.’
You try, but fail.
Then on the family, choose to bail.
Every week when mom grocery shops,
She notices that her bank account dropped.
So she carries less and less groceries in her bag
As that’s all she can carry in this drag.
I watch you as you drink your life away.
Even though you know I want you to stay.
It’s just as hard for me as it is for you.
And that’s something that you have to understand too.
I’ll watch from Heaven
As you lie in hell,
On how you wish
You lived your life well.
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When I read the poem I felt I was reading a poem actually written by a child of a drinking Father, if I understand correctly, it was just a selected project. I also felt that the poem should be read by that Father and any Father in that situation. Alcoholics, if I may use that word, need to be shown the truth and it needs to hurt, as many time as it takes for them to see and this poem would bring a tear of emotion to them that could someday help to lead them in the direction they need to go. Poetry is best written with real tears falling on the page or overwhelming joy shaking the pen. Always tell your thoughts in poetic form. I love this poem.
i think its good i really liked the ending
thats a really good poem i understood it all completely
i think its really good i liked the ending