Hi. I am thinking of including either sentence 1 or 2 or 3 in a law personal statement. Can someone suggest which sentence sounds better? Thanks
***SENTENCE 1
"While working towards my LLB degree at the University of Leicester, I learned relevant legal reasoning skills that have helped me to solve legal problems."
***SENTENCE 2
"While working towards my LLB degree at the University of Leicester, I learned relevant legal reasoning skills that have improved my ability to solve legal problems."
***SENTENCE 3
"While working towards my LLB degree at the University of Leicester, I learned relevant legal reasoning skills which improved my ability to solve legal problems."
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Sentence 3 is superior, in my opinion. It doesn't use passive voice and relates to your ability not past actions.
I agree with Anon. But I have a further comment: if you are applying to the University of Leicester, I assume you are in the UK. In correct British English the word 'towards' is not considered top class. Try 'toward'.
Sentence 2. "Improved" sounds better than "helped" and "which improved" only makes sense if "skills" is singular. It should be "which have improved" in sentence 3. If it wasn't for that, however, then sentence 3 would be superior.
3.
but change legal skills, legal problems. same word in the same sentance like that doesnt sounds all that great.
I am thinking of the third sentence would sound the best
But thats just my opinion
I'd go with Sentence 2. 'That' is the qualifier.
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